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very writer has a personal style, but all good writing tends to observe guidelines and conventions that communicate meaning clearly and exactly to readers. Scientific writing, in particular, must be precise and unambiguous to be effective. This chapter presents guidelines for correct sentence structure and word usage. Other chapters of this book present topics also related to good writing style. Chapter 2 discusses the parts of a scientific paper; Chapter 3 presents an overview of the editorial process. Chapters in Part 2 address more specialized rules for usage; see, especially, Chapter 9 on grammar, punctuation, and spelling and Chapter 10 on editorial style.

Correct Sentence Structure Good organization (see Chapter 2) and sentence structure are an author’s primary tools for conveying information in a logical, persuasive manner. When the words in a sentence are placed so that the reader follows easily from one fact or point to the next, then the reader is best able to comprehend the author’s intended meaning. Poorly structured or ordered sentences create confusion for readers, who are then unable to understand accurately the author’s meaning. Short, simple declarative sentences—that is, sentences that make statements, rather than pose questions, issue commands, or exclaim—are the easiest to write and the easiest to read. They are also usually clear. However, too many short sentences in a row can sound abrupt or monotonous. They also can place too heavy a burden on the reader to connect the ideas from one sentence to the next. To Copyright 2006 American Chemical Society In The ACS Style Guide; Coghill, A., et al.; The ACS Style Guide; American Chemical Society: Washington, DC, 2006.

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add sentence variety and to enhance the flow of ideas, it is better to start with simple declarative sentences and then combine some of them, rather than to start with long rambling sentences and then try to shorten them. Two or more simple sentences (sentences with one independent clause and no subordinate clauses) can be combined to form a compound sentence. A complex sentence is created by adding one or more subordinate clauses to a simple sentence. A clause is a group of words that has a subject and a verb. If a clause can stand all by itself, it is an independent clause. If a clause cannot stand alone, it is a dependent or subordinate clause.

Verbs Voice A sentence is said to be in active voice when the subject of the sentence is the doer of the action indicated by the verb. The subject of an active verb is doing the action of the verb. In passive voice, the subject is the receiver of the action indicated by the verb. ➤ Use the active voice when it is less wordy and more direct than the passive.

poor The fact that such processes are under strict stereoelectronic control is demonstrated by our work in this area.

better Our work in this area demonstrates that such processes are under strict stereoelectronic control.

➤ Use the passive voice when the doer of the action is unknown or not important or when you would prefer not to specify the doer of the action. The solution is shaken until the precipitate forms. Melting points and boiling points have been approximated. Identity specifications and tests are not included in the monographs for reagent chemicals.

Tense Using the appropriate verb tense helps to orient the reader as to the nature of the information. ➤ Simple past tense is correct for stating what was done, either by others or

by you. The solutions were heated to boiling.

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Jones reviewed the literature and gathered much of this information. We found that relativistic effects enhance the bond strength. The structures were determined by neutron diffraction methods.

➤ Present tense is correct for statements of fact.

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Absolute rate constants for a wide variety of reactions are available. Hyperbranched compounds are macromolecular compounds that contain a branching point in each structural repeat unit.

➤ Present and simple past tenses may both be correct for results, discussion,

and conclusions. The characteristics of the voltammetric wave indicate that electron transfer occurs spontaneously. The absence of substitution was confirmed by preparative-scale electrolysis. IR spectroscopy shows that nitrates are adsorbed and are not removed by washing with distilled water.

However, the use of present or simple past tense for results, discussion, and conclusions should be consistent within a paper. Other Forms ➤ It is acceptable to use split infinitives to avoid awkwardness or ambiguity.

awkward The program is designed to assist financially the student who is considering a career in chemistry.

better The program is designed to financially assist the student who is considering a career in chemistry.

ambiguous The bonded phases allowed us to investigate fully permanent gases.

better The bonded phases allowed us to fully investigate permanent gases.

Subjects and Subject–Verb Agreement ➤ Use first person when it helps to keep your meaning clear and to express a

purpose or a decision. Jones reported xyz, but I (or we) found ….

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I (or we) present here a detailed study …. My (or our) recent work demonstrated …. To determine the effects of structure on photophysics, I (or we) ….

However, avoid clauses such as “we believe”, “we feel”, and “we can see”, as well as personal opinions.

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➤ Subjects and verbs must agree in person and number; this important point is

discussed in detail in Chapter 9.

Sentence Modifiers Modifiers made up of phrases or dependent clauses can be added to simple sentences to indicate, for example, cause and effect, or time sequence, or comparison. ➤ A restrictive phrase or clause is one that is essential to the meaning of the sen-

tence. Restrictive modifiers are not set off by commas. Only doctoral students who have completed their coursework may apply for this grant. Several systems that take advantage of this catalysis can be used to create new palladium compounds.

➤ A nonrestrictive phrase or clause is one that adds meaning to the sentence but

is not essential; in other words, the meaning of the basic sentence would be the same without it. Nonrestrictive modifiers are set off by commas. Doctoral students, who often have completed their coursework, apply for this teaching fellowship. Several systems, which will be discussed below, take advantage of this catalytic reaction.

➤ A misplaced modifier is one that is placed next to the wrong word in the sen-

tence, so it inadvertently misrepresents the author’s intended meaning.

incorrect We commenced a new round of experiments unable to point to meaningful conclusions.

correct Unable to point to meaningful conclusions, we commenced a new round of experiments.

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➤ A dangling modifier is one that lacks a word in the sentence to modify in a logical or sensible way. It should not be confused with an absolute construction, which modifies an entire sentence. (See also the discussion of dangling modifiers in Chapter 9.)

incorrect Adding 2 mL of indicator solution, the end point for the titration was reached.

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correct Adding 2 mL of indicator solution, we reached the end point for the titration. When we added 2 mL of indicator solution, the end point for the titration was reached.

Sentence Construction and Word Order ➤ Use an affirmative sentence rather than a double negative.

instead of

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This reaction is not uncommon.

This reaction is common. This reaction is not rare. This reaction occurs about 40% of the time.

This transition was not unexpected.

This transition was expected. We knew that such transitions were possible.

This strategy is not infrequently used.

This strategy is frequently used. This strategy is occasionally used.

This result is not unlikely to occur.

This result is likely to occur. This result is possible.

➤ Watch the placement of the word “only”. It has different meanings in differ-

ent places in the sentence. Only the largest group was injected with the test compound. (Meaning: and no other group) The largest group was only injected with the test compound. (Meaning: and not given the compound in any other way) The largest group was injected with only the test compound. (Meaning: and no other compounds) The largest group was injected with the only test compound. (Meaning: there were no other test compounds)

➤ Be sure that the antecedents of pronouns are clear; in other words, when you use a pronoun (for example, “he”, “she”, “it”, or “they”), the noun to which the pronoun refers should be obvious (for example, “Isaac Newton”, “Marie Curie”,

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“the compound”, or “the research team”). This is particularly true for the pronouns “this” and “that”. If there is a chance of ambiguity, use a noun to clarify your meaning.

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The photochemistry of transition-metal carbonyl complexes has been the focus of many investigations. This is due to the central role that metal carbonyl complexes play in various reactions.

unambiguous The photochemistry of transition-metal carbonyl complexes has been the focus of many investigations. This interest is due to the central role that metal carbonyl complexes play in various reactions.

➤ Use the proper subordinating conjunctions. (Conjunctions join parts of a sen-

tence; subordinating conjunctions join subordinate clauses to the main sentence.) “While” and “since” have strong connotations of time. Do not use them where you mean “although”, “because”, or “whereas”.

poor Since solvent reorganization is a potential contributor, the selection of data is very important.

better Because solvent reorganization is a potential contributor, the selection of data is very important.

poor While the reactions of the anion were solvent-dependent, the corresponding reactions of the substituted derivatives were not.

better Although the reactions of the anion were solvent-dependent, the corresponding reactions of the substituted derivatives were not. The reactions of the anion were solvent-dependent, but (or whereas) the corresponding reactions of the substituted derivatives were not.

Parallelism Parallelism, or parallel construction, is the use of words or groups of words of equal grammatical rank. Equal grammatical rank means that words are connected only to words, phrases only to phrases, subordinate clauses only to other subordinate clauses, and sentences only to other sentences. Establish parallel construction by using coordinating conjunctions, correlative conjunctions, and correlative constructions.

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➤ A coordinating conjunction is a single word, such as “and”, “but”, “or”, “nor”, “yet”, “for”, and sometimes “so”.

incorrect Compound 12 was prepared analogously and by Lee’s method (5).

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Compound 12 was prepared in an analogous manner and by Lee’s method (5).

➤ A correlative conjunction is a pairing of words, such as “either … or”; “neither

… nor”; “both … and”; “not only … but also”; and “not … but”.

incorrect The product was washed either with alcohol or acetone.

correct The product was washed with either alcohol or acetone. The product was washed either with alcohol or with acetone.

incorrect It is best to use alternative methods both because of the condensation reaction and because the amount of water in the solvent increases with time.

correct It is best to use alternative methods both because of the condensation reaction and because of the increase in the amount of water in the solvent with time.

incorrect Not only was the NiH functionality active toward the C-donor derivatives but also toward the N donors.

correct The NiH functionality was active not only toward the C-donor derivatives but also toward the N donors. The NiH functionality was not only active toward the C-donor derivatives but also active toward the N donors. Not only was the NiH functionality active toward the C-donor derivatives, but it was also active toward the N donors.

➤ A correlative construction is a sentence structure that uses “as … as” (for

example, “as well as”). He performed the experiment as well as I could have done it.

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➤ Do not try to use parallel construction around the word “but” when it is not

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Comparisons ➤ Introductory phrases that imply comparisons should refer to the subject of

the sentence and be followed by a comma.

incorrect Unlike alkali-metal or alkaline-earth-metal cations, hydrolysis of trivalent lanthanides proceeds significantly at this pH.

correct Unlike that of alkali-metal or alkaline-earth-metal cations, hydrolysis of trivalent lanthanides proceeds significantly at this pH. Unlike alkali-metal or alkaline-earth-metal cations, trivalent lanthanides hydrolyze significantly at this pH.

incorrect In contrast to the bromide anion, there is strong distortion of the free fluoride anion on the vibrational spectroscopy time scale.

correct In contrast to the bromide anion, the free fluoride anion is strongly distorted on the vibrational spectroscopy time scale.

➤ Use the verb “compare” followed by the preposition “to” when similarities are

being noted. Use “compare” followed by the preposition “with” when differences are being noted. Only things of the same class should be compared. Compared to compound 3, compound 4 shows an NMR spectrum with corresponding peaks. Compared with compound 3, compound 4 shows a more complex NMR spectrum.

➤ Do not omit words needed to complete comparisons, and do not use confusing word order. The subordinating conjunction “than” is often used to introduce the second element in a comparison, following an adjective or adverb in the comparative degree.

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incorrect The alkyne stretching bands for the complexes are all lower than the uncoordinated alkyne ligands.

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The alkyne stretching bands for the complexes are all lower than those for the uncoordinated alkyne ligands. The alkyne stretching bands are all lower for the complexes than for the uncoordinated alkyne ligands.

incorrect The decrease in isomer shift for compound 1 is greater in a given pressure increment than for compound 2.

correct The decrease in isomer shift for compound 1 is greater in a given pressure increment than that for compound 2. The decrease in isomer shift in a given pressure increment is greater for compound 1 than for compound 2.

➤ Idioms often used in comparisons are “different from”, “similar to”, “identical

to”, and “identical with”. Generally these idioms should not be split.

incorrect The complex shows a significantly different NMR resonance from that of compound 1.

correct The complex shows an NMR resonance significantly different from that of compound 1.

incorrect Compound 5 does not catalyze hydrogenation under similar conditions to compound 6.

correct Compound 5 does not catalyze hydrogenation under conditions similar to those for compound 6.

exception These idioms can be split if an intervening prepositional phrase modifies the first word in the idiom. The single crystals are all similar in structure to the crystals of compound 7. Solution A is identical in appearance with solution B.

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➤ Phrases such as “relative to”, “as compared to”, and “as compared with” and words such as “versus” are also used to introduce the second element in a comparison. The things being compared must be parallel. The greater acidity of nitric acid relative to nitrous acid is due to the initial-state charge distribution in the molecules.

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The lowering of the vibronic coupling constants for Ni as compared with Cu is due to configuration interaction. This behavior is analogous to the reduced Wittig-like reactivity in thiolate versus phenoxide complexes.

Correct Word Usage The words chosen by a writer are one of the defining characteristics of that author’s style; however, word choice is not governed by style alone. The audience for a paper (as discussed in Chapter 3) must influence a writer’s choice of words so that the writer can select words that are likely to be known to the audience and define the words that are not. The type of document also may influence a writer’s word choices because some documents, such as scientific papers, journal articles, and books, tend to more formal word usage, whereas other documents, such as e-mails, allow less formality. The choice of the correct word to express meaning begins with a good dictionary, but it also extends to understanding small differences in meaning between two words or phrases that are almost synonymous or that are spelled similarly but have significant differences in meaning. It is best to use words in their primary meanings and to avoid using a word to express a thought if such usage is uncommon, informal, or primarily literary. Many words are clear when you are speaking because you can amplify your meaning with gestures, expressions, and vocal inflections—but when these same words are written, they may be clear only to you. This chapter presents only a few words and phrases that are commonly misused in scientific writing; consult a good reference on word usage for more comprehensive assistance. (Several such references are listed under the heading “References on Scientific Communication” in Chapter 18.)

Grouping and Comparison Words ➤ Use “respectively” to relate two or more sequences in the same sentence. The excitation and emission were measured at 360 and 440 nm, respectively. (That is, the excitation was measured at 360 nm, and the emission was measured at 440 nm.)

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➤ Use the more accurate terms “greater than” or “more than” rather than the imprecise “over” or “in excess of ”. greater than 50% (not in excess of 50%) more than 100 samples (not over 100 samples) more than 25 mg (not in excess of 25 mg, not over 25 mg)

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➤ Use “fewer” to refer to number; use “less” to refer to quantity. fewer than 50 animals fewer than 100 samples less product less time less work

➤ However, use “less” with number and unit of measure combinations because they are regarded as singular. less than 5 mg less than 3 days

➤ Use “between” with two named objects; use “among” with three or more named or implied objects. Communication between scientists and the public is essential. Communication among scientists, educators, and the public is essential. Communication among scientists is essential.

Commonly Confused Words and Phrases ➤ Choose “myself ” and “me” depending on your meaning. “Myself ” is a reflex-

ive pronoun that is used only in sentences in which “I” is the subject, whereas “me” is used as a direct or indirect object or the object of a preposition. “Myself ” is never a substitute for “me”. Please give a copy of the agenda to Anne and me. (not to Anne and myself) I myself checked the agenda. Cheryl and I checked the agenda. (not Cheryl and myself) The agenda was checked by Barbara and me. (not by Barbara and myself)

➤ Choose “due to”, which means “attributable to”, only to modify a noun or

pronoun directly preceding it in the sentence or following a form of the verb “to be”. Cutbacks due to decreased funding have left us without basic reference books. The accuracy of the prediction is due to a superior computer program.

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➤ Choose “based on” and “on the basis of ” depending on your meaning. Phrases starting with “based on” must modify a noun or pronoun that usually immediately precedes or follows the phrase. Use phrases starting with “on the basis of ” to modify a verb. The doctors’ new methods in brain surgery were based on Ben Carson’s work.

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On the basis of the molecular orbital calculations, we propose a mechanism that can account for all the major features of alkali and alkaline earth catalyzed gasification reactions. (not Based on …)

➤ Choose “assure”, “ensure”, and “insure” depending on your meaning. To assure is to affirm; to ensure is to make certain; to insure is to indemnify for money. He assured me that the work had been completed. The procedure ensures that clear guidelines have been established. You cannot get a mortgage unless you insure your home.

➤ Choose “affect”, “effect”, and “impact” depending on your meaning. When

“affect” is used as a verb, it means to influence, modify, or change. When “effect” is used as a verb, it means to bring about, but as a noun it means consequence, outcome, or result. “Impact” is a noun meaning a significant effect. The increased use of pesticides affects agricultural productivity. The use of polychlorinated benzenes has an effect on the cancer rate. The effect of the added acid was negligible. The new procedure effected a 50% increase in yield. The impact of pesticide use on health is felt throughout the world. The acid did not have a great impact on the reaction rate.

➤ Use “whether” to introduce at least two alternatives, either stated or implied. I am not sure whether I should repeat the experiment. I am not sure whether I should repeat the experiment or use a different statistical treatment. I am going to repeat the experiment whether the results are positive or negative.

Use “whether or not” to mean “regardless of whether”.

incorrect I am not sure whether or not to repeat the experiment.

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correct I am not sure whether to repeat the experiment. Whether or not the results are positive, I will repeat the experiment. Whether or not I repeat the experiment, I will probably leave the laboratory late tonight.

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➤ Use “to comprise” to mean “to contain” or “to consist of ”; it is not a synonym

for “to compose”. The whole comprises the parts, or the whole is composed of the parts, but the whole is not comprised of the parts. Never use “is comprised of ”.

incorrect A book is comprised of chapters.

correct A book comprises chapters. A book is composed of chapters.

incorrect Our research was comprised of three stages.

correct Our research comprised three stages.

Use of “A” and “An” ➤ Choose the articles “a” and “an” according to the pronunciation of the words

or abbreviations they precede. See pp 257 and 264 for the use of “a” and “an” with chemical elements and isotopes. a nuclear magnetic resonance spectrometer an NMR spectrometer

➤ Use “a” before an aspirated “h”; use “an” before the vowel sounds of a, e, i, o,

“soft” or “short” u, and y. a house, a history (but an hour, an honor) a union, a U-14C (but an ultimate) a yard (but an ylide, an yttrium compound)

➤ Choose the proper article to precede B.A., B.S., M.A., M.S., and Ph.D., accord-

ing to pronunciation of the first letter. a B.S. degree an M.S. degree a Ph.D.

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Words and Phrases To Avoid ➤ Avoid slang and jargon. ➤ Be brief. Wordiness obscures your message and annoys your readers.

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➤ Omit empty phrases such as As already stated It has been found that It has long been known that It is interesting to note that It is worth mentioning at this point It may be said that It was demonstrated that

➤ Omit excess words.

instead of

consider using

It is a procedure that is often used. There are seven steps that must be completed. This is a problem that is …. These results are preliminary in nature.

This procedure is often used. Seven steps must be completed. This problem is …. These results are preliminary.

➤ Write economically (and usually more precisely) by using single words

instead of phrases.

instead of

consider using

a number of a small number of are found to be are in agreement are known to be at present at the present time based on the fact that by means of despite the fact that due to the fact that during that time fewer in number for the reason that has been shown to be if it is assumed that in color, e.g., red in color in consequence of this fact in length in order to in shape, e.g., round in shape in size, e.g., small in size

many, several a few are agree are now now because by although because while fewer because is if just state the color, e.g., red therefore, consequently long to just state the shape, e.g., round just state the size, e.g., small

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in spite of the fact that in the case of … in the near future in view of the fact that is known to be it appears that it is clear that it is likely that it is possible that it would appear that of great importance on the order of owing to the fact that prior to reported in the literature subsequent to

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➤ Do not use contractions in scientific papers.

incorrect The identification wasn’t confirmed by mass spectrometry.

correct The identification was not confirmed by mass spectrometry.

➤ Do not use the word “plus” or the plus sign as a synonym for “and”.

incorrect Two bacterial enzymes were used in a linked-enzyme assay for heroin plus metabolites.

correct Two bacterial enzymes were used in a linked-enzyme assay for heroin and its metabolites.

➤ Do not use “respectively” when you mean “separately” or “independently”.

incorrect The electrochemical oxidations of chromium and tungsten tricarbonyl complexes, respectively, were studied.

correct The electrochemical oxidations of chromium and tungsten tricarbonyl complexes were studied separately.

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➤ Avoid misuse of prepositional phrases introduced by “with”.

poor Nine deaths from leukemia occurred, with six expected.

better Nine deaths from leukemia occurred, and six had been expected.

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poor Of the 20 compounds tested, 12 gave positive reactions, with three being greater than 75%.

better Of the 20 compounds tested, 12 gave positive reactions; three of these were greater than 75%.

poor Two weeks later, six more animals died, with the total rising to 25.

better Two weeks later, six more animals died, and the total was then 25.

➤ Do not use a slash to mean “and” or “or”.

incorrect Hot/cold extremes will damage the samples.

correct Hot and cold extremes will damage the samples.

➤ Replace “and/or” with either “and” or “or”, depending on your meaning.

incorrect Our goal was to confirm the presence of the alkaloid in the leaves and/or roots.

correct Our goal was to confirm the presence of the alkaloid in the leaves and roots. Our goal was to confirm the presence of the alkaloid in either the leaves or the roots. Our goal was to confirm the presence of the alkaloid in the leaves, the roots, or both.

➤ If you have already presented your results at a symposium or other meeting

and are now writing the paper for publication in a book or journal, delete all references to the meeting or symposium, such as “Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen”, “This morning we heard”, “in this symposium”, “at this meeting”, and

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“I am pleased to be here”. Such phrases would be appropriate only if you were asked to provide an exact transcript of a speech. ➤ Avoid using the word “recently”. Your article or book may be available for a long time. This word will make it look dated in little time.

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It was recently found that these effects enhance the bond strength.

better Harris and Harris (2006) found that these effects enhance the bond strength.

Gender-Neutral Language The U.S. government and many publishers have gone to great effort to encourage the use of gender-neutral language in their publications. Gender-neutral language is also a goal of many chemists. Recent style guides and writing guides urge copy editors and writers to choose terms that do not reinforce outdated sex roles. Gender-neutral language can be accurate and unbiased and not necessarily awkward. The most problematic words are the noun “man” and the pronouns “he” and “his”, but there are usually several satisfactory gender-neutral alternatives for these words. Choose an alternative carefully and keep it consistent with the context. ➤ Instead of “man”, use “people”, “humans”, “human beings”, or “human species”, depending on your meaning.

outdated The effects of compounds I–X were studied in rats and man.

gender-neutral The effects of compounds I–X were studied in rats and humans.

outdated Men working in hazardous environments are often unaware of their rights and responsibilities.

gender-neutral People working in hazardous environments are often unaware of their rights and responsibilities.

outdated Man’s search for beauty and truth has resulted in some of his greatest accomplishments.

gender-neutral The search for beauty and truth has resulted in some of our greatest accomplishments.

In The ACS Style Guide; Coghill, A., et al.; The ACS Style Guide; American Chemical Society: Washington, DC, 2006.

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➤ Instead of “manpower”, use “workers”, “staff ”, “work force”, “labor”, “crew”,

“employees”, or “personnel”, depending on your meaning. ➤ Instead of “man-made”, use “synthetic”, “artificial”, “built”, “constructed”,

“manufactured”, or even “factory-made”.

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➤ Instead of “he” and “his”, change the construction to a plural form (“they”

and “theirs”) or first person (“we”, “us”, and “ours”). Alternatively, delete “his” and replace it with “a”, “the”, or nothing at all. “His or her”, if not overused, is also acceptable. Using passive voice or second person (“you”, “your”, and “yours”) also works sometimes.

outdated The principal investigator should place an asterisk after his name.

gender-neutral Principal investigators should place asterisks after their names. If you are the principal investigator, place an asterisk after your name. The name of the principal investigator should be followed by an asterisk.

➤ Do not use a plural pronoun with a singular antecedent.

incorrect The principal investigator should place an asterisk after their name.

correct The principal investigators should place asterisks after their names.

➤ Instead of “wife”, use “family” or “spouse” where appropriate.

outdated The work of professionals such as chemists and doctors is often so time-consuming that their wives are neglected.

gender-neutral The work of professionals such as chemists and doctors is often so time-consuming that their families are neglected.

outdated the society member and his wife

gender-neutral the society member and spouse

In The ACS Style Guide; Coghill, A., et al.; The ACS Style Guide; American Chemical Society: Washington, DC, 2006.